I don’t remember
a thing about his looks.
Came in the night,
he tore the hair
from the Barbie doll
as it lay beside me.
The plucky sound,
like pulling a sucker
off its stick,
distracted me from him,
his heaviness and sweat.
My arms were caught
under my back. My right
cheek, jaw and ear
pinned to the carpet
under the sticky forehead
he had pressed
against my left temple.
That’s how I saw my
doll on her back,
head twisted and
hair torn in clumps,
same as me.
He rolled his forehead
from coarse hair to nose
on the side of my face
as if he were trying
to stand on his head.
He didn’t.
And then a wet mule sound,
or a pig, one of those boars
like in a story, and
his heavy hot body was
deflated.
He pushed himself off
still clutching my doll.
Her soft plastic face
smashed against the floor
rose with him, leaving a
pile of useless
yellow hair.
oh wow!
what a read. i like, really like the way you expressed the emotions.
xx
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Thank you. Emotion is key. I like your glittering soot.
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hurt to read, but it was vivid in its imagery and well-written
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Reading this was like getting hit in the guts, hard.
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Truly felt…ONE::
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Thank you. Much appreciated.
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Interesting twist, the way she distanced herself from the abuse, unfeeling for self but focused on dolly. I like your job with this!
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Thank you. Felt natural, like self preservation, like hiding in the basement during a storm, to have her focus on the unfeeling, unaware doll. She can climb inside the doll, but still feel sorry for her.
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very strong imagery, your words hit like drums…
moved.
A++
bless you and bless all …
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Thank you, Jingle!
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OMG, you wrote it in such a way I felt the horrow and oppression of it all. Amazing.
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Thank you. That’s good to know. This one was difficult.
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darnitt, i so didn’t want to cry yet this morn.
so raw and emotional!
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Thank you. And for your tears, as well. Hope you have a happy day now and forward.
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I hate this for how real it is.
too much.
so thats some amazing writing.
I feel strangely blessed to have read it.
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Pretty powerful stuff. It leaves one feeling awful. That is a compliment, btw.
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Thank you. I’m glad it elicited raw emotions, even negative ones. I appreciate the compliment.
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Wow! Such powerful imagery. Made me cry. 😦
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you captured agony. amazing write 🙂
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Deeply moving…
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I feel all the words I wanted to use after having read this have already been used. Thank you though, it felt like time no longer passed. Thank you for sharing a beautiful piece!
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Very raw, and abstract. Good read! 🙂
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Thank you. I’m glad you stopped by.
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Powerful, painful, brilliant
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Elegant poetry!
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